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THE END!
Well…of Chapter 16, at least.
I hope you’ve enjoyed this chapter! It was a DOOZIE!
For all of you who have read along day by day…do me a favor?
Read the whole chapter through and tell me what you think.
I’d love to hear your take on it.
OH! And thanks to Cheesy1 for commenting “AS YOU WISH” in yesterday’s comments. I actually changed today’s page to have that in there. It works perfectly!
And any time I can squeeze in another Princess Bride reference…I’m doing it!
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Yaaaaaaaaaaay! 😀
YES!! He said it! Thank you, Cheesy1! Best way to end a book EVER!
Out of curiosity, what was Alex originally going to say?
Congrats on the great work Scott!
I’ve enjoyed reading and even advertising my own Youtube series here. I’ll probably stop running the ads tomorrow, though.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
“Out of curiosity, what was Alex originally going to say?”
I’d love to, Nastajia, if I can find the time
You see being a king’s a hassle and Felecity needs help
But it’s sure nice talking to you, Nastajia
It’s been sure nice talking to you”
“Only if I get a free brewski out of the deal.”
What else did you think he would say? 🙂
I see what you did there.. 😀 Now you made me want to watch The Princess Bride again!
Thanks Cheezy1!
You’ve only seen it once?!?
Princess Bride much?
But not in a bad way.
Great chapter out =)
Nice way to end the chapter. One thing that bothers me though is the lighting in Alexander’s eyes, it looks weird if you start comparing both eyes back and forth
Congratulations on reaching yet another milestone, Scott!
Uh… did the ad sidebar sort of fall through to the bottom of the page, or is it just me?
+1 for Princess Bride reference 🙂
I see what you mean, the left eye should be darker than the other one because of the turn of the head, which means that light reflecting off it does not look right.
The Princess Bride quote is a funny one, because we have spent the last two weeks speaking nothing but Princess Bride and are about to get our copy out to subject our kids (repeatedly) to the classic.
nope! it’s not just you^^
YES YES YES!!!! I love the reference!
D’Awww. Princess Bride reference. 🙂 Totally made my morning.
If you think about it, Alex is kind of like the Dread Pirate Roberts. Sword+Armor = King of Dreamland.
🙂
Thanks Cheesy1!
It was originally going to be a full page splash with the two of them holding hands and her asking the question.
Thank you. And sorry for the delay in writing back.
Hopefully I’ll have a bit more time to go through my inbox now.
Fixed.
Wonderful! Since you’re open to revisions.. I thought I’d be a nudge and note that, in ‘The Princess Bride,’ I think Wesley only every said that to a direct command. So, it might sound better to harden up the question. I don’t mean to make it a command (since she is, really, asking), but maybe to remove the ‘Will’ and just go with, “Help me find…?” Or, even, “I need you to…”
Hm. Good point.
Contemplating…
Help me, Alex Carter of Virginia^W^W, you’re my only hope!
On a more serious note, second that. (Was going to say this myself but got distracted by the page layout.)
Dude Scott the whole chapter read like a book is awesome! I cried along with felisity this time. I even noticed little details in pages that I didn’t noticed first time. For example the “string” of faeries at the beginning Of the battle. Especially the fact that you can zoom in and make out the details of each Laurie. Do you you read stories that fans send? Did you name all the rock giants?
Aw, come on! You can never go wrong quoting The Princess Bride!
You really can’t go wrong with the Princess Bride ref. Best part is, he may even mean it as such — he’s probably seen the movie. Unfortunately that means she doesn’t know what he’s REALLY saying is _ ____ ___…
I so helped call that. 🙂
O.O He siad it! *fangirl squeel of epic delight* YAY!!!!!!!!! Thank you Cheesy1 and Scott!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I concur!
Good call on that, Jen!! “Is this a kissing book?!” lol
Aw, that was sweet. Of course she wouldn’t understand the reference, but he does.
“…that when wesly said as you wish, he was saying I love you” or something like that 😛
And a salute to the passing of Peter Falk! 😀
When Peter Falk died a few weeks ago, I sniffled every time I read this quote that circulated around Facebook:
“R.I.P. Peter Falk. The world might remember you as Columbo, but you’ll always be reading ‘The Princess Bride’ to Kevin Arnold and me.”
You’re most welcome, sir! 🙂
That is… the correct answer. Wonderful chapter, Scott! I look forward to the next with anticipation.
For those of you who haven’t looked at it, please consider helping with the Kickstarter… even a dollar from each of the regular viewers would probably finish it off, and that would be awesome.
I just read the whole chapter, as you requested. It’s good. Very exciting, and it transitions nicely from action to dialogue, etc. It also builds up lots of anticipation for the next chapter. And I love how you have some of the really detailed awesome pictures, such as Nic with fire.
Would that be lyrics from “Felicity’s in the Cradle”?
I don’t remember where it was that i found this site. I just started reading this a short time ago.
I think the art is great!!!. love the characters!!! And most of all I love the story.
Well done sir, Well done.
Twue wuv will fowwow you fo-evah, so tweasuwre yo wuv…
Thank you! Nice to meet you.
Thanks Lily!
Just swap the ‘will you..’ to a ‘You will…’ and you have the required change of inflection. 🙂
Excellent end-page for an excellent on-going story!
It’s sad to know that this will come to an end some day, but it is worth the journey!
Thanx a lot Scott!
“Doesn’t sound too bad. I’ll try to stay awake.”
“Oh, well, thank you very much, very nice of you. Your vote of confidence is overwhelming.”
“Inconceivable!”
It could have been worse. The original dialogue:
Nastajia: Will you help me find my parents, Alexander?
Alex: I’m too busy fixing the kingdom with Nicodemus dead. Maybe next month?
Nastajia: You can die too for all I care. [she pushes him over the railing]
Alex: AS . . . YOU . . . WISH.
Nastajia: Oh, my sweet Alexander! What have I done?
“As you wish.” !!!???
Never in his life yet has Alex ever said, “As you wish.” -2 points for stepping so far out of character for PB reference and another for pandering to the crowd – may as well have him holding a sign reading, “Applause.”
Sorry to interject with a non-comic item, but this scene from a Comic convention was just too awesome not to point out.
http://www.reddit.com/r/pics/comments/iqgah/this_kid_had_lost_his_dad_in_the_crowd_and/
“I don’t think [that word] means what you think it means.”
Thanks jakesdad for giving me something to read for 1/2 hour. wow…
You know, some writers pretty much create their works around their favorite stories. You have been able to work you favorite stories into YOUR story.
I love it.
Can never go wrong with a Princess Bride reference! Love it! 😀
lol nice reference
As you wish!!!!! Yay!
haha, I was thinking of this scene when I read this page.
Nastajia: Ah. Are you going to help me find my parents? We could start tonight.
Alex: [sincerely] Nastajia, you know how much I love you, but I’ve got my country’s political stability to worry about, our wedding to arrange, my catgirl friend to console and to find a way to get my sleep doctor across to Dreamland for the two to reunite. I’M swamped.
Nastajia: Get some rest. If you haven’t got your health, then you haven’t got anything.
scott!
great characters, great story, great art, great pages and great chapters!
this is really a extremely good comic!!!! definetely my favorite!!!!!^^
You will take me to Jabba.
I just finished all of this in less than a week, it is very well done, the art and storyline. I love it 🙂
hahaha i definitely like this better XD
*Makes a whip cracking sound.*
I heartily disagree. Alex has done many things recently that he never did before, like taking his responsibilities seriously, and putting the welfare of others ahead of his own.
Not to mention loving Nastajia more than he loves himself, and consciously coming to grips with that fact, which makes the “As you wish” totally in character.
Wait, is this the END? Like, completely over? Please tell me there are still gonna be more chapters…
[Thank you.]
But at the very end of the movie, the kid asks his grandpa to come back and read the story again. Grandpa replies “As you wish.” So the movie supports either use.
…AHAHAHHAHAHA xD
Oh gosh I’m dying over here.
Won’t that mean more work for getting copyright during the movie? I do not know if you can quote one money in an entirely different movie. (although you probably can)~ thinking of a few examples.
No, that’s fine.
Not to be nitpicky, as this comic has been a joy for me to read for years now, but I think this chapter ending would have had more impact if you did a big one-page splash. However, I wouldn’t face the capture cam at their faces, but rather at their backs. looking at each other as they are now side by side but getting a view of what is in front of them(the sea and everything). Kinda like graphical foreshadowing and the suggestion of the big adventure ahead. Just my two cents. 😉
Fezzick Are there rocks ahead?
If they are we’ll all be dead!
ahahaha Aweeeesoooome!!
All of the Princess Bride references in here are truly amazing.
I’m beginning to think I should actually see this ‘Princess Bride’ movie.
@Naraldur
Ur awsome just cos of you’re picture XD
Yay! And I begin to like Alex, finally.
:-]