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Hey all!
So, this was originally (according to my script) the first page after the Pharaoh’s tale).
I like the abruptness of it all (after finding out what happened to her parents).
But if you could please re-read the last dozen pages or so and tell me if it still has its “punch” after inserting the “explanatory fillers” of the last two pages… I’d appreciate it.
Also…
I finished a Nastajia Ashenheart Art Nouveau Watercolor Painting the other day.
I put the original up on Kickstarter as one of the pledges (it sold in 15 minutes).
So, I now have 125 high end prints available as up-pledges if anyone’s interested.
We’re almost at our initial goal! Thank you all!
Nicodemus Plushes…here we come!
🙂
Aaaaand…. just realized the Queen is reaching for Nastajia’s arm palm down. But grabs her palm up. Ugh.
Will try to fix later….
She’s not in a good mood… :S
Beautiful painting!
It still has punch. 🙂 The way it plays out now, it’s almost like Nastajia is taking the two “filler” pages to come to her own decision about what to do. 🙂
I totally and completely agree!
It’s interesting to see Nastajia acting hastily, after all the time she’s spent holding herself back. All that training, all that counsel to think of her responsibilities before acting – and she’s ready to put it all aside the moment she finds out where her parents may be. Is Alexander going to be the cooler head here, for a change?
Whatever situation her parents are in, they’ve been there for several years now. It’s possible they need to be rescued NOW RIGHT THIS MINUTE!!! – but not likely. She’s been waiting all this time to find out what happened to them; I suppose it’s not surprising she can’t stand to wait any longer – but it would be a darned good idea to prepare first! If nothing else, they should look at the Pendragon tablets that are still intact.
Going back a few days and reading straight through, the pacing seems to work just fine even with the two extra panels of explanation. In fact, it might work to your advantage, assuming the next few panels are going to be about trying to get Nastajia to think before rushing off. They now have a bit more to think about!
I also agree on this, reading all the last pages, i would do the same thing as Nastajia. Or maybe thats becouse im also that impulsive as see is 😉
I’m still loving this Epic web comic.
if you hadnt of said anything i would never have noticed 🙂
Uh oh. Visiting Niviene seems to have changed Nas quite a lot.
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I didn’t notice that…
I love the painting! especially the little Alex in the corner 🙂
so much haaairrrr 0_0
I am unfamiliar with royal protocol, but i hope the Queen tells Nastajia off for being childish here.
I think it has plenty of punch. Too bad days are descrete. You could add even MORE punch if you had panel one be some continuation of yesterday’s panel’s conversion and have her interrupt Alex.
Yep. She could use a little slap back to reality. Or dreamity. Whatever.
It still retains the punch, it certainly surprised me when I first read it. I think that Nastajia politely remained quiet when Alex spoke first and then immediately acted on her desire to go and rescue her parents.
I think it works with the few pages of exposition.
That’s what I was thinking… although to make it work, maybe the few panels in the last 2 pages where we see Nastajia’s face in the background, make her more distracted and/or anguished looking instead of being so interested in Alex’s “silly” questions? Can you make her purse her lips or something?
So she can still be listening to the conversation.. but thinking hard about her own stuff at the same time. I do that all the time when people are discussing science around me… They would start off with one idea and I would be looking at them while they’re talking, then they move on to another vaguely related idea and I would look like I’m studying my beer glass in great concentration instead of listening and everyone would forget I was there. But I’m actually just mulling over everything that was said previously while semi-listening to what is going on now, and trying to piece them all together. Then when there’s a pause in the conversation, I would suddenly chime in for the first time in a while with a question that would tie the whole conversation together, or bring up an important point/question/suggestion related to the previous idea.
I agree with Jeremy, while this is still fine; it took me a second to make sure I hadn’t skipped a page.
Explanation pages come along as Alex and the Pharao mulling over a few things to get more understanding while Nastajia is making up her mind. Is not so sudden as if she ‘d rushed in right after the tale. Nooope, that wouldna be her stile. considering and thinking stuff over is.
So, in my opinion: has enough push and energy.
oh my. puNch, not push. silly me.
My is she so gung ho to head to the Nightmare Realm!?! I have yet to see Alex voice his concern…!
That look was just EVIL.
Aaw. Poor Nastajia.
My reaction to this page was “Oh, snap!”
I actually said it out loud.
I never (well, almost never) use such “hip” sayings. So yeah, I think it still has the desired punch.
😉
Just shows you how tricksy elves can be! 😉
This is quite a contrast from when they crashed into the kingdom of the Dwarves. Alex was all ready to start slicing and dicing, but it was Nastajia who kept her head.
What, if anything, Alex does next will be revealing. He tends to defer to her judgment normally, but this time I really hope he can get her to calm down a little. If nothing else, it would be a way of showing what he brings to their relationship, as a partner.
Weird how she takes crap from the sea witch but not from the sky people. Both even used the word “foolish”.