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Happy Monday!
Hope you had a wonderful weekend.
Now, all of you (and I’m sure there are a LOT of you out there) who know your history…PLEASE don’t think I’m an authority on history.
I’m not.
EVERYTHING I got…I got from Wikipedia or something similar. Okay?
So when you tell me how wrong I am here…please be gentle. I’m just an art student trying to tell a fun story.
🙂
I wish this was updated faster just to see if this works
So, the portal is the one Niviene is using, or is there another portal for the nightmare kingdom? That would explain how the nightmare realm creatures could come to our world.
Different portal all together…or so as I see. Here I am going to stop for as I fear to speak the word….Stargate. 😀 Evil Hittites go in, they don’t go out.
uh-oh!
Triple uh-oh!
I fear what’s coming next, but I know it’ll be exciting!
Lovin’ the Egyptian stuff! ^.^
Hey Scott,you’ll get no gripes from me on your “anachronisms” there! I can ponder what’ll be like if done in the Scandinavian style of runes and art carvings. 😉
We may be about to find out why when Arthur proposed showing his enemies Dreamland so they could see ‘peace was attainable’, Nic went ballistic / homicidal / treasonous. If they’d tried that trick before, and the result had been disaster for Dreamland…
Fair point there…
Sorry for sounding critical the other day. I really do enjoy the story, Scott. I do. As always, beautiful work!
Really enjoying this sequence.
Two minor wording comments. Last panel, should it be ‘king of the Hittites’ as opposed to just ‘king of Hittites?’ Can some of the other grammarians on here shed some light on this? I’ve always understood ‘Hittite’ to refer to the people, so it would be like saying ‘King of the Britons.’
Second, in panel two. Saying ‘made it happen’ doesn’t seem like Nievine; sounds more 20th century. ‘It took several years, but they were ultimately successful’ or something like, perhaps?
Great story so far.
Uh oh. It looks like TWC is down. What do we do? What do I do?
Man, I need my voting fix! 🙂
No apologies necessary.
I need all of your input. Especially when it comes to grammar and history.
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Scott:
I would consider revising the dialogue in Panel 2. You have created a very ancient feel with the hyroglyphs and Niviene other language… so “BUT THEY FINALLY MADE IT HAPPEN” really sticks out as MODERN VERNACULAR. Its mostly the MADE IT HAPPEN part that needs revision. Something along the lines of “But they finally accomplished this miraculous feat!”
Hope that helps! 😉
Honestly? I know that you are trying to stick to history, but there’s no way your story can ever be perfectly right with history. In my view, this is your story, so you should feel free to make your story’s history whatever you want.
Rejoice, fellow Dreamies! TWC is back, and we’re #6 with 13,262 votes.
That’s it for this month. Slightly more than 442 votes a day. Down one point compared to the previous month.
We can do better than that, we’ve done once. Have you voted this month? Thanks a lot. If not… well, tomorrow looks like a perfectly good day to start. Try it. You’re gonna like it. Just think of all the people out there who haven’t enjoyed Scott’s marvellous work yet. The closer The Dreamland Chronicles are to their right place in the TWC rating (which, of course, is #1,) the more of them would occasionally click the link and join us. All because you took a couple of seconds to vote. I just cannot think of a better deed accomplished as easily. So try it, all right?
Thank you!
I will fix ASAP
I thought it was off myself when lettering it.
I must have thought to myself “I’ll put temporary dialog down and revise it later” when I wrote it. Stupid Scott from the past.
On the other hand, don’t take your history from the Mummy/Scorpion King series. Not that I think you would, or did.
If you’re accepting suggestions, I think “they finally succeeded” would fit.
Up to you, though; I am no historian either, language or otherwise.
(I replied to the wrong post: I’m talking about panel two.)
Scott very well done. Thank you for sharing this story with us, your readers. I hope one day when I have kids to let them read this amazing narrative.
lol I think it’s funny how they wrote “had pity” and such … the writer(s) felt very superior to Ramses.
Just glad I could help! I love the project and only wish you all the best success.